while you draw your hard lines
and box with your words
i struggle in time
with the death-rattle birds
and thoughts like hyenas’
gibbering glee
as those dead zombie jaws
take a chunk outta me
Charissa's Grace Notes
while you draw your hard lines
and box with your words
i struggle in time
with the death-rattle birds
and thoughts like hyenas’
gibbering glee
as those dead zombie jaws
take a chunk outta me
Charissa's Grace Notes 
Your poem is one that demands that your readers read it over and over again.
Yes. It is moving and travelling in many levels!